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Broken Wings. by ~MyRowBoat:iconMyRowBoat:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Horror & Macabre > Open




I cannot fly; my wings are broken, and born to die.

I scream but make no sound.

My cries are ripped and stunned to the ground.

Darkness slips through my hands, as I cover my face.

Under my skin I feel it, holding me tight in a lace.

I cease to believe as bright light doesn’t appear.

Wandering alone in the deepest state of fear.

Tear myself free and scream at the sky.

But all I hear is my hearts inner cry.

Need your eyes to give me sight,

To hold my fear and give me light.

So please by my shadow when all is lost.

And I shall love you at whatever cost.
©2004-2009 ~MyRowBoat
:iconmyrowboat:

Author's Comments

Wrote it late at night, while i was sitting imagening all this... very exiting.


pic: I scream a lot.

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~Ladyisha May 18, 2004, 4:33:49 PM
i love this... the pic and the poetry :) good job

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:skullbones: LadyIsha :skullbones:
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~SykoBloodCraze May 18, 2004, 8:05:18 PM
I like this one...the first line starts the poem off well, and it continues nicely. the most vivid line, in my opinion, would be the third one. I was a little unclear on the next to last line...but i definitely like this. very nice poem.

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:pointr:WiLL WoRk FoR CoMmEnTs:pointl:
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"We all did it... it must be right."
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~dariomanno May 19, 2004, 12:23:42 AM
Mmmm... nice. It's interesting, these days many of us wish to scream, with anger and disspapointment in our voice, but all we want is love. And to give it. How and why... I love your poem :nod:
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~MyRowBoat May 19, 2004, 1:20:32 AM
Yes! :) thank you for that opinion! I'm so glad when people notices the love.
And thanks for the fav!

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Painless love and endless trust, broken wings, that bears too much. [link]

I am amir of the Desert :meditate: I fly come run through you

Come to my Tent and I'll circumsize you :chainsaw:
:iconmyrowboat:
~MyRowBoat May 19, 2004, 1:24:43 AM
It can be hard to follow the little world in my mind, but try and read it again maybe, It should make sense... Think in images. anyways, really glad you like it :D

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Painless love and endless trust, broken wings, that bears too much. [link]

I am amir of the Desert :meditate: I fly come run through you

Come to my Tent and I'll circumsize you :chainsaw:
:iconhezekiah:
~hezekiah May 19, 2004, 2:17:20 AM
Nice conveyence of the imagery; and an excellent rhyme scheme as well. I got subtle feeling of desperation and longing while reading this... Which is great of course:D.

Really excellent work!

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!Bad Bunnies! :ninjastar::jackdirt: !Bad Bunnies!
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~MyRowBoat May 19, 2004, 2:22:42 AM
Thanks! (= Just the feeling you where supposed to get! The feeling I had. great :)

(now get on msn)

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Painless love and endless trust, broken wings, that bears too much. [link]

I am amir of the Desert :meditate: I fly come run through you

Come to my Tent and I'll circumsize you :chainsaw:
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~abandon-me May 19, 2004, 7:40:05 AM
When I read it, it played to a perect melody... mellow and soft. It seemed to be a feeling of lonliness... being alone is emotionally draining... the image in my mind when I read this was you, standing underneath a dark blue sky... staring up into the night, a tear that wouldn't fall... so instead of a cry, you let out a small helpless moan... not being able to scream. You look away from the empty sky... and sink to the ground and close your eyes... thinking of the one you're making yourself love... I loved it.
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~MyRowBoat May 19, 2004, 8:11:29 AM
Oh my... I'm Honoured. I never thought anyone else could feel my poem this much... impressive! (= Thank you so much! Which song was it? I must know.

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Painless love and endless trust, broken wings, that bears too much. [link]

I am amir of the Desert :meditate: I fly come run through you

Come to my Tent and I'll circumsize you :chainsaw:
:iconabandon-me:
~abandon-me May 19, 2004, 8:15:25 AM
It wasn't a song I'd ever heard... your words had their own melody... it was one I couldn't hum or sing... but one I could feel. And feeling it was so strange... it was like I was feeling someone elses emotion.
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